peaceful prose

I’ve been setting myself a few writing challenges recently and linking up with Writing Warriors over at Beautiful Misbehaviour to blog about them. This week, one challenge was to write a short piece of prose. It’s not something I normally do; creative writing for me usually means short stories of at least 1500 words. Flash fiction is outside my comfort zone but I figured, why not try something new?

This is what I came up with (and it’s under 200 words!):


She lay submerged, floating peacefully just below the surface. Now and then, fragments of the world beyond drifted down to her; sounds she was dimly aware of but could not respond to. It was so calm down here. She felt suspended in time, her mind free to roam and tumble between realms.

A thought, barely formed, drifted across her consciousness. Was there something she needed to do? She loitered, not wanting to leave this tranquil space. But a sound had begun insistently burrowing its way in to her brain, nearly rousing her to action, but not quite… not quite. Reality could not reach her yet, even as she felt it stretch out its fingers. Let me stay a while longer, she pleaded silently, let me stay.

Attempting oblivion, she dived deep. But it was not enough; a piercing cry twisted and gouged its way through her skull. She was dragged violently upwards and found herself exploding through the surface.

She was fully awake. The baby was screaming. Sighing, she heaved herself from her warm bed and dragged leaden limbs through the darkness, leaving sleep’s soft sunbeams scattering in her wake.


As you may have guessed, this is a scenario I am familiar with. I love my sleep and being dragged from it is not something I relish!

I’m linking up with Prose for Thought over at Verily Victoria Vocalises.


Prose for Thought

12 thoughts on “peaceful prose

  1. Stephanie

    The start of this make me think of Ophelia in the lake, the ending was sadly familiar! Always good to try new things!

    1. Maddy Post author

      Ah I can imagine that image when reading it too. I’ve always felt that sleep and floating under water have something in common so I was trying to work with that. Got to try new things out!

  2. Emily Page

    Well done on extending your comfort zone. This is great. Expect all mums (and dads) can relate but at first it has a mystical, dreamlike quality letting the reader guess where it might take them. Congratulations.

  3. David / Oddly active

    Oooh, I know that feeling! I think the only thing worse than being forced awake is being completely knackered and not being able to GET to sleep ‘cos your brain is out of sync with the rest of your body…

    A fine bit of ‘out of comfort zone’ muscle flexing :) #Prose4T etc

    1. Maddy Post author

      Thanks David! And worst of all is not being able to get to sleep when you’re knackered and then being woken up as soon as you’ve finally got to sleep! Argh!


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